Not to be a grammar cop, but you missed the "S" in "installments" on the home page. FYI.

I'll read through it when I get a chance.

No offense, but I stopped reading after the first few paragraphs. To me, what I read of your work seemed more like an outline of a novel--or perhaps a bland journalistic account of your subject matter--than a fictional narrative. In my opinion, the first couple of paragraphs of a novel--especially a good one--should grab the reader's attention by introducing him to a distinct imaginative world. Think, for instance, of the opening passages of Don Delillo's White Noise, Dickens' Great Expectations , Hammett's Red Harvest, Chandler's The Big Sleep, Dreiser's Sister Carrie Faulkner's The Sound and the Fury or Melville's Moby Dick. In reading these texts, one has the feeling of being instantly transported into a new world, of being shown something for the first time. Your writing, instead, does so much telling, is so heavily distanced from its subject matter that it is almost entirely drained of any subjectivity, of anything that makes a novel a novel, and of anything that makes creative writing creative.

These comments may sound harsh, but they're not meant to be discouraging. I simply think you are in the very early stages of discovering your narrative voice, of figuring out what you want to say and how you will say it. But the fact is that you need to do so and would probably benefit from studying the opening passages to any of your own favorite literary texts while paying special attention to how they immerse the reader in a unique experience, how they create a distinctive system of meaning from the very first word.

In essense, I will attempt to make this a sort of narrative blog that parallels "real life" and covers events in our lives that occur in real-time.